Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Ice Storm of 1998

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Ice Storm of 1998[edit]

I think this is an incredibly well written article, that is worthy of being a featured article. Ardenn 18:53, 19 May 2006 (UTC)[reply]

  • Oppose fails criteria 2c, 3a. The WP:LEAD needs to be expanded and references need to improved. See {{Cite web}}. Also the article needs some in-line citations. Sentences such as "Prior to the 1998 storm, the last major ice storm to hit Montreal (1986) deposited around 30 to 60 millimetres (1½ to 2¼) of ice." should be cited. Joelito (talk) 18:59, 19 May 2006 (UTC)[reply]
  • Object per above (lack of a proper lead, among other things the lead would appear on the main page if featured) as well as 3c, lacks a reference section let alone inline citations. I didn't see any real POV issues so inline cites might not be so critical, but references are certainly needed for an FA. Also noticed various inconsistancies:
    • Inconsistant measurements style. Says 'mm' in some places, says millimeters (unlinked) in others, says millimeters (linked) later on.
    • got the nickname of "the triangle of darkness" this is mentioned twice in the body of the text and feels rather redundant. Also it doesn't say who gave it that nickname.
    • It first says 25 people died do the storm, then further down it says 25 to 44 people died. --W.marsh 19:19, 19 May 2006 (UTC)[reply]
  • Object:
  • Please expand the lead to conform with guidelines at WP:LEAD. The article should have an appropriate number of paragraphs as is shown on WP:LEAD, and should adequately summarize the article.
  • Per WP:MOSNUM, when doing conversions, please use standard abbreviations: for example, miles -> mi, kilometers squared -> km2, and pounds -> lb.
  • Per WP:MOSNUM, at Units of measurement, numbers with SI units of measure should have conversions in US customary units and vice versa. These conversions should keep to similar values of precision. For example, "the Moon is 380,000 kilometres (240,000 mi) from Earth". Note that the converted unit of measure uses a standard abbreviation, while the source unit is spelled out in the text.
  • Per WP:MOSNUM, there should be a no-break space -   between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
  • Generally, trivia sections are looked down upon; please either remove the trivia section or incorporate any important facts into the rest of the article.
  • Per WP:MOS#Headings, headings generally do not start with the word "The". For example, ==The Biography== would be changed to ==Biography==.
  • Thanks, AndyZ t 23:07, 19 May 2006 (UTC)[reply]
  • Oppose. While it is definitely a good article, there are still some problems with it that need to be worked out. Some more detail, especially from a meteorological point of view, should be added. CrazyC83 22:35, 22 May 2006 (UTC)[reply]