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Space Race[edit]

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I've listed this article for peer review because of it's Ex-FA status; It's been 3 years since it's last peer review, a lot of changes have been made but it's always good to get a bit of external opinion on how it's going :)

Thanks, MichaelHenley _{(Talk-Contribs)} 02:47, 12 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Jappalang

This article is not ready for peer review; as pointed in the instructions, peer review "is intended for high-quality articles that have already undergone extensive work, often as a way of preparing a featured article candidate."
Regardless, I am going to quickly point out the biggest problems that should be rectified before sending the article for a peer review. I am not going to respond any further other than the following.
There is an expansion tag in the article; all such cleanup messages should be resolved before coming here.
There are several unsourced/uncited information, including opinions such as "Had von Braun's team been allowed to orbit a satellite in 1956, the Space Race might have been over before it gained sufficient momentum to yield real benefits." that would be original research if unsourced.
Using Infobox Military Conflict is very inappropriate. The Space Race might be the substitute for a military conflict, but it is not one. That would be akin to claiming that we should make Fischer-Spassky or the Olympics during the Cold War "military conflicts". The one-up-manship prevalent between the two countries then do not make anything they do to prove superiority a military conflict.
The OR issue goes for "US-Soviet Joint Victory"; most sources claim the Space Race to be won by the US (for reaching the moon). To claim this as a joint victory would require the academic community to declare it as such; where are the academic sources that back this opinion?
File:DOS-1 Salyut-1 artist impression.JPG and File:Gagarin space suite.jpg are copyright violations as pointed out in their nominations for deletions.

Please read the peer review instructions before nominating articles here. Jappalang (talk) 01:25, 20 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]