User talk:MartinMartin226/BrHa

Criticisms[edit]

Trivial things first: learn how to italicize album titles, magazine and film names, etc. I assume you've deliberately not formatted the categories properly, so they won't show up where they shouldn't yet.

Could you improve the references, so they display authors' names, dates and the like? The present format is suboptimal.

The "discography" section is ridiculously bloated. This guy could be accused of being just one step above a session musician (most of whom are not notable enough for their own articles here); and this kind of "I played a couple of licks on an obscure album in 1964" stuff is not making your case for you. --Orange Mike | Talk 01:47, 27 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Stuff like "As a keyboardist with the Boston Pops Orchestra, he has accompanied James Taylor, Bono, and Martina McBride" is just name-dropping. Notability is not contagious: you don't catch it by working with somebody notable, not even in your own trade or craft (I sold books to Tony Bennett once; that doesn't make me any more notable). His film and TV work and that Emmy (can't you source it to the Emmy website, rather than to an article by somebody who may have confused a local "Emmy" with the real thing?) are the kind of stuff that matters, if you can provide solid sources for it. --Orange Mike | Talk 01:54, 27 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Titles are now italicized, and the references have been improved.
The discography has been pared down to include only prominent and notable recording sessions.
Left in James Taylor and a couple of other live gigs, as they seemed highly notable.
Emmy awards have been sourced to the Emmy website. MartinMartin226 (talk) 17:20, 29 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Not all titles are properly formatted
No it hasn't. Even if these recordings were all notable (which they aren't), that doesn't make his role in them notable. This is a padded laundry list.
Why? In what way are they even remotely notable? He's in an orchestra, he played a gig: so what?
Thanks; but the footnote should be by where you list his awards. --Orange Mike | Talk 19:51, 29 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Titles should all be properly formatted now
Discography replaced with much more selected listing
Live performances sentence removed
Footnotes to Emmy references are by where his awards are listed MartinMartin226 (talk) 18:00, 30 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Looks pretty darned solid now, Martin! I'd say it's ready for article space, and will move it there if you agree. --Orange Mike | Talk 18:08, 30 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Terrific. I'm waiting to get copyright permission on a photo. I'll move the article as soon as I take care of that. Thanks for all your help. MartinMartin226 (talk) 18:27, 30 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Why wait? There's no deadline for the picture. --Orange Mike | Talk 19:06, 30 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Great, I'll move it now. Thx! MartinMartin226 (talk) 20:46, 30 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]