Template:Did you know nominations/William Carpentier
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The result was: promoted by Yoninah (talk) 22:33, 28 October 2017 (UTC)
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William Carpentier[edit]
... that Apollo 11 flight surgeon William Carpentier was born in Canada?
- ALT1 ... that, after Neil Armstrong returned from the Moon, he lived for three weeks with William Carpentier?
- ALT2 ... that the "world famous physician" is Dr William Carpentier?
Created by Chetsford (talk). Self-nominated at 02:41, 28 September 2017 (UTC).
- comment only - A hook that said that after Neil Armstrong returned from the moon he lived for 3 weeks with William Carpentier - would get more clicks. Victuallers (talk) 08:59, 28 September 2017 (UTC) -->
Nominated one day after creation, and is almost 4000 characters, satisfying length and date criteria. QPQ completed. No copyvio or POV issues detected. There are two minor issues. The first is that the article states he received the "Alumni Award of Distinction", which is not stated in the source provided; however, this link provides that info. The second issue is that the second source doesn't state he became an American citizen, only that he "remained a Canadian citizen until 1993". Is there a source for the full claim? The hooks ALT1 and ALT2 are both short enough; ALT2 is sourced, and ALT1 should probably refer to "quarantine" instead of "lived with", as the latter implies a residential arrangement. Mindmatrix 16:18, 1 October 2017 (UTC)
- User:Mindmatrix - so sorry for my very delayed reply. I've made both of these corrections. Thank you for your review. Chetsford (talk) 04:40, 26 October 2017 (UTC)
- Comment: perhaps the hook could state something to the effect "...that William Carpentier was quarantined with Neil Armstrong and Buzz Aldrin after they returned from the moon?", or maybe that "...that William Carpentier was a physician to astronauts?", though there's nothing inherently wrong with the hooks you've provided, other than the tweak I noted above. Mindmatrix 16:24, 1 October 2017 (UTC)
I've filled in a bare ref for you. I'm OK with ALT1 or ALT2 with the following minor modifications: removal of "Dr" from ALT2, which I think is superfluous; and substitution of "was quarantined" for "lived" and removal of first comma in ALT1. Mindmatrix 16:35, 26 October 2017 (UTC)
- I agree with Victuallers that "lived with" is much more hooky than "quarantined with", and am promoting that hook. Yoninah (talk) 22:33, 28 October 2017 (UTC)
