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The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.

The result was: withdrawn by nominator, closed by Narutolovehinata5 talk 12:02, 29 January 2024 (UTC)

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5x expanded by Panini! (talk). Self-nominated at 01:12, 27 January 2024 (UTC). Post-promotion hook changes for this nom will be logged at Template talk:Did you know nominations/The Walking in Between; consider watching this nomination, if it is successful, until the hook appears on the Main Page.

  • Article expansion verified, date verified, and hook fact and length verified. The article is cited to independent and reliable sources. Everything is within policy except for the WP:TONE of the text which comes across as too personal and intimate as if a fan or close friend of the subject has written the article. This is largely because of the way the artist's feeling and emotions are being explained in both the lead section and the main body of the article in an informal non-academic un-businesslike tone. While writing about the motivations of artists is a part of writing on artistic works, there is a way to do that where it maintains "encyclopedic tone" and distance from the subject. There needs to be some significant editing to the prose to achieve a better balance per WP:AESTHETIC. Please ping me when the issue has been addressed or if there are questions.4meter4 (talk) 23:59, 28 January 2024 (UTC)
  • 4meter4 I'm unlikely to have this task finished in a timely manner so I'll unfortunately have to pull this nomination. Regardless, thanks for the review! Panini! • 🥪 00:19, 29 January 2024 (UTC)
@Panini! Sorry to hear that.4meter4 (talk) 00:30, 29 January 2024 (UTC)
Nomination withdrawn by nominator.4meter4 (talk) 00:30, 29 January 2024 (UTC)
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