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The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.

The result was: promoted by SL93 (talk) 20:39, 7 November 2021 (UTC)

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Say You to Yo Asobi

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  • ... that the Japanese variety show Say You to Yo Asobi collaborated with the Japan Racing Association and to feature the race horse Takarazuka Kinen?Source: Oricon (article): 番組と連動した『JRA×「声優と夜あそび 2021」宝塚記念チャレンジ』サイトでは、木曜日、金曜日のMC陣が、宝塚記念を予想した動画を特別公開。 [On the "JRA x Say You to Yo Asobi 2021 "Takarazuka Kinen Challenge" website linked to the program, the MC team on Thursday and Friday will release a special video with their predictions on Takarazuka Kinen.]

Created by Lullabying (talk). Self-nominated at 22:40, 3 October 2021 (UTC).

  • The article seems to mostly be okay at first glance and the hook fact is cited inline. However, even as a seiyuu fan myself, I'm not really a fan of the hook as currently written, it seems a bit niche and may not appeal to those who aren't into Japanese voice acting. I think there's some potential with the horse angle, but the hook will need to be copy-edited and rewritten to focus mainly on that instead. Narutolovehinata5 (talk · contributions) 11:08, 21 October 2021 (UTC)
  • Thanks for the review; the hook doesn't focus on voice acting itself but more on the show, which is what the article is about. lullabying (talk) 23:40, 21 October 2021 (UTC)
I think it would be a good idea to specifically focus on the challenges done with the horse, rather than mentioning the JRA. Narutolovehinata5 (talk · contributions) 00:44, 22 October 2021 (UTC)
It sounds better, but it may be a good idea to mention that Takarazuka Kinen is a racehorse, just in case those unfamiliar with the JRA think they may be about a different kind of racing (like for example motorsports). Narutolovehinata5 (talk · contributions) 08:59, 24 October 2021 (UTC)
I think that sounds better. Narutolovehinata5 (talk · contributions) 09:51, 2 November 2021 (UTC)
Narutolovehinata5 what's next? theleekycauldron (talk • contribs) (they/them) 08:28, 4 November 2021 (UTC)
Well for one thing I had to fix the bolding of the new proposal (which I've labeled as ALT1). Narutolovehinata5 (talk · contributions) 16:00, 4 November 2021 (UTC)
@Narutolovehinata5: do you approve the hook, then? theleekycauldron (talk • contribs) (they/them) 22:44, 5 November 2021 (UTC)
  • Rereading the article again, it reads much better and meets DYK requirements. A QPQ has been performed. While I think ALT1 is written better than the original, after taking a second look at the article, the hook doesn't actually match the article wording. The hook says that a "special video" was created, but the article instead mentions challenges done with the horse. Either the article or the hook needs to be revised to reconcile the differences. Narutolovehinata5 (talk · contributions) 04:56, 6 November 2021 (UTC)
  • Prose changed to match hook. lullabying (talk) 07:01, 6 November 2021 (UTC)
Thank you, I think there are no more issues so we should be good to go with ALT1. Narutolovehinata5 (talk · contributions) 10:32, 7 November 2021 (UTC)
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