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The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.

The result was: withdrawn by nominator, closed by Theleekycauldron (talk) 00:38, 11 January 2023 (UTC)

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Disco (Surf Curse song)

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Created by Pbritti (talk). Self-nominated at 19:58, 28 December 2022 (UTC).

  • @Pbritti: new enough, long enough, sourced, and plagiarism-free; I think that the bit about the audience "moshing wildly and joyfully" is a little puffy. I'm not sure I love this hook, if only because pop music doesn't tend to turn readers' interests too often – is there another hook that could be found? QPQ has been done, so almost there :) nice work so far! theleekycauldron (talk • contribs) (she/her) 10:48, 1 January 2023 (UTC)
    Sorry I haven't done this immediately; I'm afraid the new year caught me flatfooted. I'll ping you when done! Thanks for the help and precise critiques. ~ Pbritti (talk) 17:24, 2 January 2023 (UTC)
    @Theleekycauldron: Removed potential puffery, new alt below:
    ALT1: ... that Surf Curse's Nick Rattigan directed a music video depicting an "evening of raw emotion" for the band's single "Disco"?
    Sorry, I'm not as clever about these as I wish I was. ~ Pbritti (talk) 18:04, 4 January 2023 (UTC)
    @Pbritti: not as clever? please, pontifical is still one of the best hooks I've ever seen :) I think you've got a bit of an unlucky hand with the sources, though – it doesn't seem like you've got enough of the churn of information that usually brings a good hooky bit with it. theleekycauldron (talk • contribs) (she/her) 20:57, 4 January 2023 (UTC)
I'll give it another shot tonight (tomorrow UTC). Thanks for the kind words; "pontifical" is my favorite. ~ Pbritti (talk) 22:51, 4 January 2023 (UTC)
  • @Theleekycauldron: So it didn't happen when I thought it would, but here's a last try:
    ALT1: ... that Surf Curse's single "Disco" was inspired by the film The Last Days of Disco, has a music video that draws on Hal Hartley dance videos, and has been described as reminiscent of Vampire Weekend's early discography?
  • If this isn't quite it, my apologies! Thanks for your patience! ~ Pbritti (talk) 18:59, 10 January 2023 (UTC)
    • @Pbritti: Hmm... it's well-worded, but I don't know that the hook is all that catchy unless you're familiar with one of these (I'm not, personally, so that might be a part of it). It's totally not your fault, I don't think you had a lot to work with on this one. If you want to ask for another opinion, that's totally cool with me. theleekycauldron (talk • contribs) (she/her) 00:24, 11 January 2023 (UTC)
      • @Theleekycauldron: No, let's just close it—we can all use our time better elsewhere. Thanks again for bearing with me! ~ Pbritti (talk) 00:30, 11 January 2023 (UTC)
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