Template:Did you know nominations/David Earle
- The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.
The result was: promoted by Yoninah (talk) 14:38, 28 April 2015 (UTC)
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David Earle[edit]
* ... that David Earle's choreography Miserere is about the agony and ecstasy of Christ's earthly mission and recreates the Stations of the Cross?
- ALT1 ... that David Earle, Patricia Beatty and Peter Randazzo co-founded Toronto Dance Theatre?
- Reviewed: I have fewer than 5 DYK credits.
Created by Z1720 (talk). Self-nominated at 01:20, 20 April 2015 (UTC).
New (20th), long enough, neutral, some close paraphrasing to fix—check the other refs too, no QPQ necessary. Re: the "agony and ecstacy"—is that what the piece is about or just what the reviewer suggested it embodied? Also if it's someone's direct words, they should be quoted and, more likely, attributed. While we're here, was the piece actually "acclaimed" or does just one reviewer think it was great? The claim should be proportional to the source substantiating it. So hold on the main hook. ALT1 checks out and has an immediate ref in article (see 3b). Please ping me if I don't respond. Nice article czar ⨹ 03:23, 20 April 2015 (UTC)
- Thanks for the review Czar. I have removed the "acclaimed" line from the sentence and took out the WP:COPYVIO you mentioned. I also added more information about the piece in the paragraph that includes another citation. Since the new information does not conform to the first proposed DYK, I have prepared an alternate version below:
- ALT2 ... that David Earle choreographed a recreation of the Stations of the Cross?
- Thanks for the review Czar. I have removed the "acclaimed" line from the sentence and took out the WP:COPYVIO you mentioned. I also added more information about the piece in the paragraph that includes another citation. Since the new information does not conform to the first proposed DYK, I have prepared an alternate version below:
- Please let me know if I can improve the article any further. Z1720 (talk) 01:26, 21 April 2015 (UTC)
Shortened ALT2. Both ALT1+2 check out. Nice work and apologies for the delay (thanks for the ping). Hope to see more work on choreography and dance at DYK in the future czar ⨹ 11:28, 28 April 2015 (UTC)
