Talk:Takanohana Kōji/GA1

GA Review[edit]

Alright, this article is mostly good, though here's a few issues:

The last sentence in the lead feels kinda odd in terms of flow with the rest of the lead. Fine for a lower paragraph, but is it necessary in the lead? Maybe a short, second lead paragraph to explain family issues would be good.

I've decided to remove the sentence, if you don't think it's necessary. The lead is now a bit longer anyway. I can have a go at writing a "family issues" paragraph if you prefer though.

In 1995-1997, "Takanohana had a solid but aggressive style, looking to get a right hand grip on his opponents' mawashi and move them quickly out of the ring." sounds like a sentence that should go in the lead, rather than there.

I've moved that sentence and the one after it to the lead.

Double check that all refs have a space after them. I think I caught them all though.

Thanks, I didn't notice any of those! I've gone through and corrected a couple more.

In the table, i think the last box is supposed to be red.

Done. Pawnkingthree (talk) 23:27, 12 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Besides those issues, the article's very well written. I'll put the article on hold and keep an eye on it. Wizardman 21:59, 12 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Looks a lot better now. There's a couple things that would cause me to oppose an FAC (some more refs in the early life section, for example, could help), but as far as a GA goes this article pases. Well done. Wizardman 23:37, 14 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]