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Reviewer: FunkMonk (talk · contribs) 11:40, 14 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]

  • I guess this is meant for later FAC? We are very close to the 200 bird FA mark, so let's get the ball rolling! Some preliminary comments below. FunkMonk (talk) 11:40, 14 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • You have some nice captions for most of the images, anything to say about the one in the taxobox? Male, female, location?
it is probably but not definitely a male (sexes similar) in Albany. location added Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 12:07, 14 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Nice, capitalise first letter? FunkMonk (talk) 15:58, 14 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]
done Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 19:54, 18 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • This image[1] seems to show a feeding bird, relevant in the feeding section? Also the only photo that shows its back properly.
this was the taxobox image before - yes, re-added Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 12:09, 14 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • You don't give dates for all revisions under taxonomy.
I added the missing one (are there others?) Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 12:12, 14 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Two studies in the third paragraph need dates. FunkMonk (talk) 15:58, 14 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]
dates added Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 23:56, 15 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • "in 1854.[7]The generic" Needs space.
added Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 12:07, 14 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • Latin and Stirling Range are overlinked.
delinked Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 12:07, 14 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • You only give binomial names for some other species mentioned, should be consistent.
added Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 12:15, 14 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Mulga parrot missing, as well as hooded and golden-shouldered parrots. FunkMonk (talk) 15:58, 14 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]
oops, added Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 14:46, 15 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • The feeding section, and to a lesser extend the description section, look like walls of text, could each block be broken up into two paragraphs?
tweaked Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 14:46, 15 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • "collected in Albany, Western Australia on the Baudin expedition " Mention when this expedition took place?
1801-03 in text after title Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 14:47, 15 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • Mathews is not presented or linked.
done Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 23:58, 15 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Otto Finsch cited Kuhl in calling it Platycercus spurius in 1868" But Kuhl named it Psittacus spurius?
changed to "followed" - he used Kuhl's species name thus recognising Kuhl's name's precedence. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 11:10, 16 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • "—the main reasons" Are the?
yep/done Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 11:10, 16 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Mathews did tentatively describe a subspecies carteri in 1915" Based on what and why?
added Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 11:41, 16 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • "It was not considered distinct by later authors." What does "it" refer to here, previous sentence talks about five birds.
rejigged Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 11:41, 16 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • John Gould is not presented.
added Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 11:41, 16 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • "derived from the epithet pileatus of a synonym once used in aviculture" You state earlier that this was coined for a male specimen, seems a bit incongruent.
I reworded it to clarify Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 12:54, 16 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • "The name king parrot" Why italics?
words-as-words suggests italics, but this gets confusing with latin names. hence changed to quotes Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 11:46, 16 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • "English naturalist W. B. Alexander" Why is this name alone not spelled out?
spelt out Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 11:41, 16 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • "people of southwest region" The?
removed Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 11:10, 16 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Red-capped Parrakeet by Edward Lear, 1832" The reader will not know why you use another name here, perhaps state in the caption it is an alternate, if you even need to mention the name at all there.
removed Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 12:59, 16 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • "A larger parrot of southwest Australia" This is an odd way to begin the description section. Why do you need to state the location here, and isn't it better to name the subject at the beginning of the section?
removed the contextual bit which conflicts with another bit anyway Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 12:59, 16 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • "and easily recognised medium-sized parrot" So is it "larger" or "medium sized"? What does "larger" even mean?
see above (it means its larger than the western rosella I suspect) Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 12:59, 16 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • "base of lower mandible" The?
added Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 12:59, 16 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • "though the eye" Through?
fixed Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 12:59, 16 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • "especially suited to extract the seed within the hard, woody urn-shaped capsule of marri trees" Does this belong under description?
removed it - was going to add in feeding section but already covered there Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 13:27, 16 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • "is a series high-pitched" Of?
added Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 13:27, 16 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • "The population mostly occurs 100 km (60 mi) of the coastline" Not sure what this means?
rejigged slightly - it means most of the population occurs within 60 km of the coast Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 13:27, 16 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • "more sparse toward the edge" Sparsely?
tweaked Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 13:27, 16 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • "It also occurs in forests dominated by" The former sentence starts with "this tree species", so might be good to specify you refer to the bird instead of "it".
tweaked Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 19:58, 18 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • "The are commonly" They.
tweaked Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 13:27, 16 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Shy birds, they often retreat to the upper canopy of trees if disturbed." Perhaps group this extremely short sentence with the preceding paragraph?
tweaked Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 13:27, 16 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Adult feeding on grevillea seeds" Shouldn't that be written as a genus name?
done - also serves as common name in oz Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 13:27, 16 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • "This may be because of historical high proportion of" A historically high proportion? Current wording seems odd.
tweaked Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 13:29, 16 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • "It has long been classified in its own genus, though genetic analysis shows that its closest relative is the mulga parrot". Why "though? The article body doesn't indicate this has any bearing on its generic affiliation.
It actually lies within the genus Psephotellus, but as Purpureicephalus is the older name, the others would all have to change. Will tweak this Tweaked it and forgot to update here. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 13:29, 16 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]
This should be the last issue, would be nice to elaborate in the taxonomy section. FunkMonk (talk) 20:48, 18 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • The intro seems short compared to the article body. There could probably be more on behaviour, and maybe on the juvenile's features.
enlarged Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 13:35, 16 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • Only seem to be a couple of issues left, then I'm ready to pass. FunkMonk (talk) 14:55, 18 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • Alright, passed, off to FAC, I guess! FunkMonk (talk) 15:16, 19 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]
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