Talk:Paper fortune teller/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Chiswick Chap (talk · contribs) 18:27, 30 July 2023 (UTC)

Comments

This short and entertaining article is carefully-written and fully-cited to good sources, so I shall have few comments to make on it.

• I was expecting to see Martin Gardner mentioned as he loved all such enjoyably metamagical objects. The British Origami Society states that the Salt Cellar / Bug Catcher / Fortune-teller is among Gardner's models. —David Eppstein (talk) 21:56, 30 July 2023 (UTC)
  • It says he only reproduced known folds, but I added this to the history section, because it predates the other US citations I found.
    • Searching for more led me to a web page with many earlier precedents, which I used to expand this section a little. —David Eppstein (talk) 12:00, 31 July 2023 (UTC)
      • Many thanks, that's what I had in mind. Chiswick Chap (talk) 12:42, 31 July 2023 (UTC)
• 'History' is not in chronological order. If there's no special reason why not, I'd suggest putting the second paragraph first (with a minor tweak to make the text work in that position) and merging the other two paragraphs.
  • Ok, done. —David Eppstein (talk) 21:56, 30 July 2023 (UTC)
• All the images appear to be correctly licensed.
• I struggled a bit with the horoscope image, but [23] does verify the main text, and the image does illustrate the layout.
• [16] names the colours and Bradley but not that it's the "Swarm" artwork. I think the claim needs an additional source.
  • Ok, I re-added a Getty Images source I was using prior to replacing it with this source.
    • Yes, that does the job.
• [7] works as a source via one of its images with caption. The last sentence in particular is verified by inspection of the image and a bit of induction. It would certainly be nice to have things sourced more explicitly, but on reflection I think this isn't a show-stopper.

• [13] verifies the claim made. I'd add that the shapes are illuminated in red and yellow to give the required effect.

• Other than that it's all good to go. Chiswick Chap (talk) 19:09, 30 July 2023 (UTC)

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