Talk:Mother India/GA1

GA Review[edit]

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Reviewer: –MuZemike 20:32, 29 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Overall, it's fairly well-written, and, after taking some time to look at the sources, most everything seems to be properly verified. I went through and made some minor grammar/punctuation tweaks as well as remove some noun plus '-ing' and other wordy stuff. Just a couple of minor issues before I go ahead and pass for GA:

The title of the film is taken from American author Katherine Mayo's 1927 polemical book Mother India, in which she attacked the Hindu society, religion and culture of India. → Did Mayo attack Hindu society and the religion and culture of India? It doesn't readily make sense after reading it. Could you tweak that so that it makes more sense?
Part of the major success of the film ... which is relevant to many. → I think that sentence is a bit long and drawn out and couple help readers if that was split into two sentences.
In the lead, is there a reason why there are inline citations in the first paragraph and nowhere else (aside from the quote, in which that citation must stay there)? To me that is a little inconsistent per WP:LEADCITE.

On hold pending resolution to the three issues noted above. Otherwise, it's pretty good so far; if you can expand a bit more and tie down all the MoS stuff, this could conceivably make a run for WP:FAC. –MuZemike 20:32, 29 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Should be fixed now. Thanks for your edits.♦ Dr. Blofeld 17:18, 30 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Passed. Everything looks good. –MuZemike 02:23, 31 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks.♦ Dr. Blofeld 17:34, 31 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]