Talk:Johnny Peirson/GA1
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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 22:19, 5 July 2021 (UTC)
Shall review this article for the July 2021 GAN Backlog Drive MWright96 (talk) 22:19, 5 July 2021 (UTC)
- It is reasonably well written.
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
- Pass/Fail:
Lead[edit]
- "serving in that role for over two decades." - more than
- Wikilink university hockey to College ice hockey
- Boston Bruins doesn't need to be wikilinked twice in the lead
Early life[edit]
- "After his stint in the military, Peirson was accepted into McGill University in 1945.[2] There, he played one season for the McGill Redmen." - maybe merge these two sentences together?
- "It turned out to be McGill's final Queen's Cup for over 60 years" - more than
- Wikilink the term points to Point (ice hockey)
Minor leagues[edit]
- "who was keen to earn a bit of extra money for his education" - text in bold is informal
- NHL should be spelt out in full on the first mention and the acronyms put in parentheses
Boston Bruins (1947–1958)[edit]
- "His legs were described as having "sort of disappeared" - described by whom?
- Ref 4 (by McGill) quotes it as:
Peirson retired in 1958, because his "legs sort of disappeared."
It does not attribute the description to him. I Googled the exact quotation but this is the only source that mentions it. —Bloom6132 (talk) 11:09, 6 July 2021 (UTC) - @MWright96: I've reworded it to have the exact quote (i.e. removing "were described as having"). —Bloom6132 (talk) 16:05, 6 July 2021 (UTC)
- Ref 4 (by McGill) quotes it as:
Post-playing career[edit]
- "The pair would work together in that capacity for 18 years. They notably covered the first four games of the Summit Series for American viewers." - perhaps merge these two sentences together
Personal life[edit]
- "Peirson married Barbara Ann (Hunt) around 1951. They remained married for 70 years until his death." - these two sentences could possibly be merged together and shortened accordingly
Career statstics[edit]
- "Source: [1][2][6]" - should be Sources
References[edit]
- Reference 8 should mention it comes from NewspaperArchives.com
- Reference 13 is missing the page number stating the fact of Pierson's 1950 Canadian Open result
Will put the review on hold to allow the nominator to address or query the points raised above MWright96 (talk) 08:53, 6 July 2021 (UTC)