Talk:Hurricane Gabrielle (1989)/GA1
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Reviewer: AJona1992 (talk · contribs) 05:34, 24 June 2012 (UTC)
- Lead
- "Hurricane Gabrielle caused nine fatalities in the United States and Canada, despite remaining hundreds of miles offshore" this sentence should not open the lead. Rather "Hurricane Gabrielle was a destructive tropical cyclone that caused nine fatalities in the United States and Canada, despite remaining hundreds of miles offshore." what do you think?
- Actually, it wasn't technically "destructive", as it did not cause damage on land. However, would you agree to compromise with this: "Hurricane Gabrielle was a deadly tropical cyclone that caused nine fatalities in the United States and Canada, despite remaining hundreds of miles offshore"?--12george1 (talk) 23:57, 4 July 2012 (UTC)
- Yes I like that idea better. Best, Jonayo! Selena 4 ever 20:43, 5 July 2012 (UTC)
- Actually, it wasn't technically "destructive", as it did not cause damage on land. However, would you agree to compromise with this: "Hurricane Gabrielle was a deadly tropical cyclone that caused nine fatalities in the United States and Canada, despite remaining hundreds of miles offshore"?--12george1 (talk) 23:57, 4 July 2012 (UTC)
- History
- This section has a mixture of past-tense tone and present-tense tone, please stick with one. Example: "Satellite imagery showed the depression developing a good outflow pattern."
- Delink high pressure (second instance)
- Preparations
- "The National Hurricane Center stated in its forecast on September 3 that Gabrielle has a 10 percent chance of affecting the Leeward Islands in three days" change "has" to "had"
- United States
- Delink infant
- Delink United States Coast Guard (second instance)
- Delink swimmer
- References
- FN#1 link National Hurricane Center
- FN#2 publisher?
- Syracuse Herald-Journal is the publisher--12george1 (talk) 23:57, 4 July 2012 (UTC)
- No that's a newspaper, the publisher is William Randolph Hearst. Best, Jonayo! Selena 4 ever 20:43, 5 July 2012 (UTC)
- Syracuse Herald-Journal is the publisher--12george1 (talk) 23:57, 4 July 2012 (UTC)
- FN#4, FN#5, FN#8, FN#13 author? date? link Syracuse Herald Journal how can the Associated Press be a publisher to this publication?
- FN#6 italicize The Intelligencer - publisher?
- FN#7 italicize The Fredrick Post, publisher?, author?, date?
- FN#11 italicize The Capitol and link it, publisher?, author?, date?
Please fix these issues. Best, Jonayo! Selena 4 ever 23:32, 4 July 2012 (UTC)
Passing the article since all issues have been addressed. Best, Jonayo! Selena 4 ever 18:27, 7 July 2012 (UTC)