Talk:Fletcher Loyer

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Did you know nomination[edit]

The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.

The result was: promoted by Bruxton (talk) 15:30, 28 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]

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Expanded by TonyTheTiger (talk) and created by GPL93 (talk). Nominated by TonyTheTiger at 16:38, 18 March 2023 (UTC). Post-promotion hook changes for this nom will be logged at Template talk:Did you know nominations/Fletcher Loyer; consider watching this nomination, if it is successful, until the hook appears on the Main Page.[reply]

General: Article is new enough and long enough
Policy: Article is sourced, neutral, and free of copyright problems
Hook: Hook has been verified by provided inline citation
QPQ: Done.

Overall: Appears good to go! BeanieFan11 (talk) 16:24, 25 March 2023 (UTC)[reply]

I am feeling bad for the person - we are featuring one of his best moments and one of his worst moments. Bruxton (talk) 15:30, 28 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]


GA Review[edit]

Passed. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 19:48, 28 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.

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Reviewer: Gonzo fan2007 (talk · contribs) 16:27, 24 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]


GA review
(see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose, spelling, and grammar):
    b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references):
    b (citations to reliable sources):
    c (OR):
    d (copyvio and plagiarism):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):
    b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):
    b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

Overall:
Pass/Fail:

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Really solid article. Specific comments below. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 16:27, 24 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Comments[edit]

  • In the lead, Then, he attended Homestead High School in Indiana for his junior and senior seasons, comma isn't needed
  • In the first paragraph of the "Early life" section, His father played basketball at the University of Akron and his mom played volleyball at Indiana University, and was an assistant coach for Purdue University volleyball. - would read better with one sentence about his dad and then a new sentence about his mom. No comma needed after University.
  • In the "Homestead year" section, the same high school as former Boilermaker, Caleb Swanigan. - this seems trivial to me and more like a fun fact. Recommend removing.
  • Same section, , including 6 points that cut the deficit to 50–49 with 1:26 remaining., this seems super trivial when looking at the big picture of his overall career/bio. Maybe if they won, but the fact that they lost makes this seem pointless to include.
  • Same section, until at least February 21, 2021 due to the pandemic., you use the generic "pandemic" here, but don't state COVID-19 pandemic anywhere (you say COVID-19 lockdowns). Maye in the previous previous section say "COVID-19 pandemic lockdowns, which then makes the later use of "pandemic" more appropriate.
  • Same section, scoring record (726 points versus 702 points), you need a comma after the parenthesis
  • In the "College career" section, 23.5 point underdog Fairleigh Dickinson in Columbus, Ohio in, you need a comma after "Ohio" and Columbus, Ohio is double-linked in the article, you can delete this link.
  • In the "Personal life" section, The Loyer family also has a daughter, Jersey, Fletcher's sister. Jersey is a high school class of 2024 volleyball player at Concordia High School., this seems trivial unless she has done something notable.
    • The book is still out on whether she does anything notable. She is entering her senior year in high school. Since we have fully detailed every other member of the fam, I'll leave it in. A year from now, maybe she will be an NCAA athlete otherwise we can remove her detail. Right now leaving it in will give post 2024 editors a lead to look for an NCAA connection. However, given the athletic accomplishments of all other members of the fam, I wouldn't rule out an NCAA future.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 04:17, 28 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

References[edit]

Looks good, passing. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 19:47, 28 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

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