Talk:34th Battalion (New Zealand)/GA1

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Reviewer: Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk · contribs) 15:36, 23 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]


Will take this one. Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 15:36, 23 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Sorry for the delay, will comment within a couple of days. Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 15:41, 6 February 2017 (UTC)[reply]
  • Lead and infobox; all good
  • Section 1.1;
    • When was 8th Infantry Brigade Group raised?
      • Have added.
    • several years? from when and which "several years" is the context about?
    • defence of the colony; which colony?
      • Clarified that we are referring to Fiji. Zawed (talk) 08:49, 8 February 2017 (UTC)[reply]
      • I find this entire sentence confusing, please rephrase
        • How does it read now with the clarification? Zawed (talk) 06:37, 9 February 2017 (UTC)[reply]
    • contingent of reinforcement personnel -> contingent of reinforcements
    • date of arrival at Suva
    • F. W. Voelcker; isn't the full name available?
      • Not at this stage but there is one more source I will check. Zawed (talk) 08:49, 8 February 2017 (UTC)[reply]
    • minimal training -> minimal military training
    • before shipping to Fiji -> before being shipped to Fiji
    • military basics -> basics of warfare and tactics
    • Towards the end of 1941, and as the threat of hostilities
    • By now it was up to full strength with the recent arrival of reinforcements in Fiji; did the reinforcements arrive from Fiji, so where was the battalion? or it means, that with the arrival of reinforcements, in Fiji, the battalion was full
    • Link Major General
    • warfare in the Pacific
    • Link Guadalcanal
    • full name of R. J. Eyre?
More later ... Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 15:14, 7 February 2017 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks for the feedback thus far, Krishna, I have attended to or made comments in relation to these. Thanks. Zawed (talk) 06:37, 9 February 2017 (UTC)[reply]
  • Section 1.2;
    • advised the New Zealand Government that it was ready for combat duties; "advised" is a bit awkward, may be "informed" etc.
    • 6.25 am -> 6:25 am, per MOS:TIME
    • Reidy's full name?
      • Have added an initial, no luck with finding his given name. Zawed (talk) 07:39, 12 February 2017 (UTC)[reply]
  • Section 1.3; all good
  • Section 2; all good
  • Section 3; I prefer mentioning the full names
    • Have done, except for Reidy as I wasn't able to find out his first name. Zawed (talk) 07:39, 12 February 2017 (UTC)[reply]
  • All images are appropriately licensed
  • 17.4% confidence, violation unlikely.
Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 14:24, 10 February 2017 (UTC)[reply]
@Krishna Chaitanya Velaga: thanks for the comments, have responded above. Cheers. Zawed (talk) 07:39, 12 February 2017 (UTC)[reply]
GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:
    Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 02:22, 17 February 2017 (UTC)[reply]
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